I've been working on the same scene for WAY too long. And now, I'm almost done with it, almost pleased with the quality of the writing, and with what I've done here. But as I'm reading through it again, I'm having this kind of sinking feeling that it really doesn't work. It does advance the plot. For sure. It's interesting. I think. It has some tension, hints at some conflict, and in just a few words, it gives a tiny piece of backstory about Seth that readers should find surprising, but not entirely so.
Sounds good, right? I don't know though. I can't quite figure it out, but it just doesn't feel right. I almost feel like I could cut the whole thing and it wouldn't make a huge difference. Which sucks. Because like I said, I've put a lot of work into it.